Post by FangedSmile on Feb 16, 2006 0:51:55 GMT -6
To write a helpful review you need to point out the good and the bad. Read the chapter and THINK! What did you like? What annoyed you? Copy and paste examples from the work. Like:
Hello, Eve. I like this story, but there were a few things with it that I did not like. I do not want to sound mean as I did enjoy the story, I just think it can be improved and know the reason people put their work up here is to get some opinions on it. First, I understand that Leilani is a know-it-all and gets money from her parents. I also understand that while she can dedicate herself to studying she is also really immature.
(This allows the author to relax, and for you to state how the character was represented to you, giving them the option to change things if they had not meant for the character to come across that way.)
My problem with her, however, is that I cannot connect with her at all and find her annoying in some cases. “Let’s go shopping,” Leilani prompted. “Let’s go to an actual store, where you can actually ask for champagne, and go shopping.” This is irritating as she is a bookworm, yet a princess and I think it weakens the character. I get that she is a stylish overachiever, but the overly pricy store seems too much and sinks her to the level of annoying brat roommate instead of main character or sub main character. I was hoping to see more maturity in a future polie officer.
Get it? Then, of course, tell some things you like.
I did like-“I don’t want it to have happened either,” Chaos stated, his eyebrows retracting in sympathy. “But you seem to need to talk to someone who isn’t benefiting and I have a crippling fear of being alone during dinner, so it seems we need each other.”
This proves he has had an awakening and is a good person inside. I’m not a professional writer of course, just a reader. Please keep writing, and update soon! I would also like to read an updated version of this chapter if you write one.
You write a review this way and the author will be able to improve. Also, read other people’s reviews so you’re not running over a dead cat and to see their opinions as well. Also, the author might have replied to the reviews, though a good author won’t make excuses except, as the story goes on the characters evolve.
Oh! Wait, another thing. Don’t state the same, 'Please keep writing' in every review. If you did not truly like the story, say something like ‘I hope to read more and see where the plot is going.’ That way you’re giving the story a chance without preaching your love of it. If you did love it, tell so. ‘I LOVE this story and I can’t wait until the next chapter.’
Hello, Eve. I like this story, but there were a few things with it that I did not like. I do not want to sound mean as I did enjoy the story, I just think it can be improved and know the reason people put their work up here is to get some opinions on it. First, I understand that Leilani is a know-it-all and gets money from her parents. I also understand that while she can dedicate herself to studying she is also really immature.
(This allows the author to relax, and for you to state how the character was represented to you, giving them the option to change things if they had not meant for the character to come across that way.)
My problem with her, however, is that I cannot connect with her at all and find her annoying in some cases. “Let’s go shopping,” Leilani prompted. “Let’s go to an actual store, where you can actually ask for champagne, and go shopping.” This is irritating as she is a bookworm, yet a princess and I think it weakens the character. I get that she is a stylish overachiever, but the overly pricy store seems too much and sinks her to the level of annoying brat roommate instead of main character or sub main character. I was hoping to see more maturity in a future polie officer.
Get it? Then, of course, tell some things you like.
I did like-“I don’t want it to have happened either,” Chaos stated, his eyebrows retracting in sympathy. “But you seem to need to talk to someone who isn’t benefiting and I have a crippling fear of being alone during dinner, so it seems we need each other.”
This proves he has had an awakening and is a good person inside. I’m not a professional writer of course, just a reader. Please keep writing, and update soon! I would also like to read an updated version of this chapter if you write one.
You write a review this way and the author will be able to improve. Also, read other people’s reviews so you’re not running over a dead cat and to see their opinions as well. Also, the author might have replied to the reviews, though a good author won’t make excuses except, as the story goes on the characters evolve.
Oh! Wait, another thing. Don’t state the same, 'Please keep writing' in every review. If you did not truly like the story, say something like ‘I hope to read more and see where the plot is going.’ That way you’re giving the story a chance without preaching your love of it. If you did love it, tell so. ‘I LOVE this story and I can’t wait until the next chapter.’